Reflection

            Over the semester I have written in many different styles from week to week, which was different. Throughout high school I usually just wrote a typical five paragraph essay, but instead we wrote things like arguments, proposals, movie reviews, and many other types of writing. I really liked writing in different styles because after awhile writing the same way can get boring. The other good thing was that my writing would be posted to my blogpost, which kind of made me more aware of my writing because I was writing in a place were the world can see. When I looked back at my blogs and saw grammatical or spelling errors I was kind of embarrassed knowing so many people can see it. Thanks to the different styles I wrote in I will be better prepared for future jobs or in future classes.

            There are a variety of reasons why the writing I have done this semester will help in the future and one of those reasons is that “employers’ biggest complaint is the unclear writing produced by their new hires” (WITW 60). Since I already know how to write in different styles and know how to write for the public employer will have no issues with me. I probably have a higher chance of getting employed or being praised for the work that I will be able to write or present. My work would be clear and employer would not be confused on what I am writing about due to the fact that I have done it before. The same frustration that employers can feel professor can feel the same way. If a professor asked for a specific style of writing and a student doesn’t know how to do or does it wrong they are already behind the curve. Since I have written in all these different style I will be ready for anything and a little ahead of the other students or other people trying to get a job.

            It is clear that the writing assignment over the semester have only been beneficial and very helpful. Now that I have written in different styles I can expand my writing and don’t have to limit myself. My writing has definitely improved in multiple ways and I am glad that I was able to write and learn different styles. Overall the semester went well and was very effective with helping students be prepared for the future.      

Why 8:00ams should not exist?

Dear Bridgewater State University,

A problem in this university is that classes’ start to early and student constantly complain about 8:00ams. When it came to registering for class the majority of student do not sign up for 8:00ams sometimes they are just forced to take a class that early because the other times are taken. 8:00ams are one of the last classes to fill up student try there hardest to avoid 8:00ams. A Bridgewater State University student, Mark Tyo, said, “ My worst grade is in my 8:00am class. I’m just really tired in the morning and I struggle to focus in class. My performance in the class is suffering because the class is just to early. If the class was just a little later that would be great.”

            A solution to this problem would be to push all the times back an hour. If all the hours were push back nothing would really change except the evening rate for classes. The evening rate would start a little later then usual.

            If classes were to start later it would benefit basically everyone on campus. Teachers would be able to sleep at later times and have more time to grade test and quizzes. The cooks and chefs would be able get a better nights rest and probably be more efficient at their jobs. The students would be able the study longer and get a good nights rest. If students had more time to study they probably would do better on test and quizzes and if they got a good nights rest they would be able to focus better in their morning classes. According to Times “The data showed that kids who didn’t get enough sleep were not only more likely to have problems understanding during class, a result the researchers had expected, but they were also more likely to do badly on tests, quizzes and homework — the very outcome the students were staying up late to avoid.” These students lost sleep for studying and did more harm then good, but student would not lose sleep if they had more time to study. So pushing the times back student would be able to study longer and still get plenty of hours to sleep. Also since classes would start later students would have more time to be able to have breakfast and start the day off right. It was reported by Food and Nutrition Service that “Breakfast is often described as the most important meal of the day, and rightfully so -- it not only provides important daily nutrients such as protein, fiber, calcium and carbohydrates, but it also helps improve school performance, allowing students to do better on tests.” Student would benefit tremendously if classes were a little later and they would have a better chance of succeeding in school.

             

                                                                                                     Sincerely,

                                                                                                                

                                                                                                                     Angel Olmo 

Why people should be certified to be parents?

           A very controversial topic now a day is whether or not people should be certified to become parents. It is not easy to be parent and raised a child. A lot goes into taking care of a child like time, money, and patience. Many people don’t have all of these attributes and struggle to take care of their children. So people should be certified to become parents because there are a lot of different situations that kids are left in and theses situations are not favorable to the kids.

            Since once someone hits puberty they are able to have children this can cause problems because sometime they might not be ready and might still be very young.  According to the Guttmacher Institute there is about “ Thirty-one of pregnancies are unwanted and another twenty percent are mistimed.” So basically over half of the pregnancy in the United States are mistimed or unintended leaving unborn children in horrible situations. The unborn child can be born into family that cannot support it or a family with an unstable situation, which can lead to a child being mistreated.

            Sometimes when a child is unwanted or not intended it can lead to abortions. It is the mother decision whether or not to keep the child, but this can be prevented by making sure people are certified to be parent and this will lead to a lot more wanted pregnancy. If people are certified there will be less abortions and the child will be given a chance to live a life. According to the American Life League the “Total number of abortions in the U.S. 1973-2011: 54.5 million+ and there are about 1.2 million abortions per year.”  Over the years we have lost many lives that did not even get to live because of parents not being ready or not wanting the child.

            Other option for children born into poor situation is they can be sent to foster care or put up for adoption. It was reported by the Foster Club “If nothing changes… by the year 2020 there will be 22,500 children will die of abuse or neglect, most before their fifth birthday.”  That is about 23 percent of the children in foster care today. Also according to AACAP “Approximately 1200,000 children are adopted each year in the United States.” Many of the children adopted come out of Foster care and mostly like have been abuse, which according to Huffpost the kids “are more likely to suffer reactive attachment disorder, which are essentially the inability not only to bond, but to feel. The effects are not just psychological, but also physical, with evidence these children can have elevated levels of the hormone cortisol, which increases their pain tolerance for pain.” Since some of these children have very high pain tolerance they can be beaten much more severely and that can lead to adopted parent getting out of control. In many cases adopted parents have killed their adopted child because it took a lot more for the child to react and the parent ends up killing the child. Erick Eckholm from the New York Times reported “ I have not been able to get four-year-old Sean Paddock, or 11-year-old Hanna Williams, or 7-year-old Lydia Schatz out of my mind.” Those were three different cases of children dieing from abuse by their adopted parents. There have been cases about parents that adopt that have killed, but there are cases of parents killing their children as well.

            Lastly, when parents with unwanted kids do not resort to any of the option mentions above they might end up doing the unthinkable and killing their child or children. According to USA Today News “three decades of FBI homicide data shows that on average, 450 children are killed every year by their parents.”  Unwanted kids or mistimed kids lead to a lot of unwanted results. Many kids have died and none of their deaths were their own fault. These parents that killed their children were probably under a lot of stress because the kid was not planned or they were just unfit to be a parent, but this can all change.

            Having people certified to become parents can prevent these problems and deaths. This can be done by when someone becomes the age of, which puberty starts doctors will put a contraceptive against pregnancy until they get a license to be a parent or get certified. Many lives will be saved and there will be many much happier families if this happens. Teens and young adults will be able to live their lives to the fullest without having a kid that may change the course of there lives. This will help a lot because people that want kids will have kids and people who do not will not.

             

            

What has The Ice Bucket Challenge has done for ALS?

          ALS is a very vicious disease and many don’t live long once diagnosed. The Ice Bucket Challenge was started to raise awareness about ALS and has had a lot of success. People all over the world have been part of or involved with the Ice Bucket Challenge. The Ice Bucket Challenge has helped the ALS Association a great deal due to how it made more people aware, educated, and more people have donated.

            It hard to say who actually started the challenge, but once it did start it took off. The challenge has been done from your average American to the president of the United States. Once famous people start doing something everyone else will start as well. According to Lucy Townsend “There have been in excess of 2.4 million ice bucket-related videos posted on Facebook, and 28 million people have uploaded, commented on or liked ice bucket-related posts.On image sharing website Instagram there have been 3.7 million videos uploaded with the hashtags #ALSicebucketchallenge and #icebucketchallenge.” To the regards of the hashtags about thirty percent of the tweets in the United States are about ALS. Obviously due to social media people all over the world are more aware, which leads to people donating more to charity to help ALS foundations.

For example, reported by BBC News “From 29 July to 28 August this year ALS received $98.2m - compared with $2.7m donated during the same period last year.” This means that ALS has received more in one month then ever in the past year. People were donating at an exceptionally fast paced. The challenge has helped the ALS association a great deal. According to data company Dataviz “From 1 August to 27 August this year, the ALS Wikipedia page had 2,717,754 views. This compared with the 1,662,842 people who had visited the page during the whole of the preceding 12 months.” People are becoming more aware and educated about ALS. It shows how only a few knew about this disease and now it seems as if everyone knows. It would probably be weird now a day to find someone that does not know about the disease. Since people are donated a lot more they are becoming educated on ALS so they know where there money is going.

 It was reported by BBC News that the 

Average daily visits to the ALS association website were about 17,500 before the ice bucket challenge, compared with the peak of 4.5 million visits on 20 August (of which 83% were new to the site). During the past month there have been about 30 million visitors in total. And as of 29 August the ice bucket challenge had 4,483,726 Twitter mentions. ALS Twitter followers had increased from 8,975 in early July to 21,100.

 Since more people are visiting there website they must know more about ALS. They probably learned what it does to the body and mind and this is due to the fact the donated. No one could have predicted that the Ice Bucket Challenge would be so popular and help as much as it did. The challenge was something that come out of nowhere without warning and took the world and especially the United States by storm.

Guardians of the Galaxy

            Some of the weaknesses of the film, “Guardians of the Galaxy”, are character development and the script. The Guardians of the Galaxy is another addition to the Marvel, which has been very successful. The movie is about an unlikely group of people that come together to help save the galaxy. Peter Quill, the main character, who is also known as Star Lord is played Chris Pratt. The opening scene is Peter Quill’s mother on her deathbed and she passes away causing Peter to run outside the hospital, which lead to him being abducted by a group of ravagers. The ravagers are lead by Yondu who is the one that ended up raising Peter. Peter ends up being wanted by a numerous amount of people because he takes an orb that has enormous power and he has a bounty on his head. The people that become closes to him are the ones that tried to capture or kill him. They eventually become a group of heroes that attempt to save the galaxy.

            Some characters are important to the story, but it feels like they lack detail or attention to some of the character’s story. For instance, Ronan is the villain they are trying to stop, but not much is known about him. It is not known why or how he becomes a villain in the first place. We get a very small story about him and nothing else. The same thing happens with the other characters like Groot, Gamora, Drax, and Rocket we really don’t know a lot about them so we cannot really connect with them like we do with Peter. All those character are part of the group so there should be a lot more about them.

 Also parts of the script like some of the dialogue are poor and kind of confusing. Also the actors don’t give any help with the dialogue as well they are monotone most of the time with no kind of emotions. The only character that shines is Peter Quill: he is the main character, but the other character should not be so far behind. For example, one of the heroes is Drax who is played by Dave Batista and Dave does not act well. It is probably because he has not acted in many movies, but it just sound like he is reading the script with no emotion. It is really hard to tell what he is feeling because he has no other tone but one.

Other than the characters flaws the movie is a good and everyone should watch it. It has a great plot and story line and it would be enjoyable for everyone. It also is a great addition to Marvel and has potential to have many other good sequels.

A Friend In Dire Need

At BSU on October 30^th in a residence, Shea & Durgin, on the second floor there was a student that apparently smoked marijuana and got too high because it was his first time, which lead to Bernard Jones being taken to the hospital.

It was reported that the roommate, Charles Baker, told the ISO “My roommate needs help he’s bugging.” The ISO later said, “I wasn’t really sure what to do, but I told the student to notify a RA and that I was going to call medical.” The RA also called the cops and soon after the cops were on the scene. When the cops walked in Baker said that a cop said, “That must have been some good shit.” Officer Banks talked to Bernard and told him “There’s not much we can do for you, but we can call an ambulance if you want?” and Bernard said, “Yes, I want to go to the hospital.”

Other students that were on the floor asked, “Why Charles didn’t ask any of us for help.” Charles said, “I was really scared for Bernard. I saw a bunch of people I knew, but couldn’t really think straight and the only thing on my mind was getting help. I felt that none of my friends were really going to help because whatever they could do I could do. When I was running downstairs all I could remember was Bernard saying, "I need medical attention. I need medical attention." so I just ignored everyone I saw and just got help.” Some of the students said, “Charles was stupid for getting help and that they would have never gotten help. They would have just told Bernard to shut up and calm down.” Bernard is lucky that his roommate Charles got help because clearly some would not have.

Bernard was taken to Signature Healthcare Brockton Hospital. He was brought in, but they couldn’t really diagnose him with anything and the Doctor reported, “It was his first time and he got too high. We just had him sleep it off and we would determine whether if he could go home or not in the morning.”

Bernard was released in the morning and got to BSU around seven and he said, “Even when I got back, I still felt like I was high. I really wasn’t the same till two days later on Saturday.”  Bernard reflected on what Charles did for him and said, “I wanted Charles with me when I smoked for the first time because I felt he would be the best person to be with. I knew if anything went wrong I could trust him and he would help me and that’s exactly what he did.” 

The Significance Of A Nurse

            Some might think it is easy to be a nurse that keeps track of babies in a nursery, but it is not uncommon for babies to go missing according to Dr. Joel Freeman, “on average, around the world, twelve newborns will be given to the wrong parents daily.” So if the nurses didn’t work as hard these numbers could be much higher. Sometimes nurses can be very under appreciated, but they have a very important and difficult job. 

Nurses have a key job in making sure babies get to the right parents. It would be a little awkward if a baby were returned to the wrong parent for instance, a woman named Teresa recounts a story about her first child, “The baby had black hair, mine had red hair. The nurse kept insisting that I take the black-haired baby, thinking I was refusing to take my own baby. Finally she checked the bracelet, and ran out of the room.” In order for this not to happen that often they must have a good memory. The nurses have a very demanding job because they have to maintain the well being of the child and make sure the child has whatever it needs. The nurses are very well experienced and they have to be because not just any ordinary nurse can do the job. According to Innerbody since, “medical technology has made it possible for more ill and premature babies to survive and thrive. This has expanded the range of responsibilities for neonatal nurses and the spectrum of care they provide.” So imagine if nurses were not that experienced the statistic would be a much larger number than just twelve and parents would be extremely frustrated. Parents would be happy to know that nurses go through many years of schooling and sometime still need extra certification. Even though nurses are very important it was reported by the Chicago Tribune that

Some research suggests that constant skin-to-skin contact in the first 48 hours following birth can be beneficial for moms and babies, even for women who do not plan to nurse. But the shift away from nursery care has sparked a backlash among some mothers who don’t plan to breast-feed or simply want some time to rest after the trauma of childbirth and before taking up the responsibilities of child care.

           Nurses play a huge role in the baby’s life but also the mother’s life because the mother is not yet ready physically or mentally to take care of the child. There were a couple of more reports that some hospitals got rid of their nurseries, which would effects mothers tremendously. It would be a mistake to get rid of a nursery because some parents just want to relax. A nurse’s job is very serious and essential for the first few days or weeks of the mother’s and baby’s life. Also nurses should not be taken for granite and should be acknowledge much more often for their hard work.

Adriel Jeremiah Green

It is not always easy to be rich and successful, but it would seem it came natural for Adriel Jeremiah Green. He is a NFL wide receiver and he is a star. He is one of the top receivers in the NFL and he is only in his third season. He is six feet four inches tall and 207 pounds. He was also the fourth pick overall in the 20ll NFL draft.  It is surprising that Adriel has made it this far because he started playing football in high school and has been through a lot. Life can throw a lot of difficult events at you and for Adriel Green this was very true and these very traumatic events would change his life forever.

Adriel had a brother named Avionce and they did everything together. He looked up to his older brother and his brother would take care of him. Adriel said sometime Avionce would tell his parents, “Mom. Mom, Dad you don’t have to worry you don’t have to wake up I’ll cook something for me and A.J to eat.”  At age nine Avionce ended up dieing in a car accident, which Adriel ended up surviving with no injuries. After the car accident Adriel said to his father, “Daddy I tried to wake Avi up, but Avi wouldn’t wake up, Avi wouldn’t wake up I tried but he wouldn’t wake up.”  The loss of Avionce was devastating to Adriel and he struggled to get over his brother’s death. When Adriel’s mother, Dora, was asked about how Adriel took the death of his brother she said, “He was sad all the time. He would come in and look at Avionce’s picture.”   Upon Avionce’s death he joined the juggling team and performed at high school varsity games.

As he got older he realized juggling was childish and joined real sports like basketball and football. The juggling help Adriel with hand eye coordination and was an automatic star in football. When John Mckissick was asked about Adriel he said, “A.J was about as talented as a guy I’ve seen. He was just dominate in everybody that we played.”  He was also a very talented basketball player and started varsity his freshman year. His coach was Louis Mulkey, but Mulkey was an assistant coach and he was no ordinary coach because he would sometimes seat right behind A.J in class. Mulkey would do this because A.J was not a good student and struggled in school. Mulkey was also a fire fighter and was killed in a fire. Adriel’s family was watching the fire on the television and Adriel said, “ Coach Mulkey ain’t come out yet daddy.” The death of Mulkey really hurt A.J and he felt when there was someone to look up to they were taken, but Adriel didn’t give up. Adriel had an exceptional senior year in football and lead his basketball team to a state championship. Adriel has been through unimaginable situations and he just says, “ I juggle all situations that comes my way.” Adriel is a tough guy and has been trough a lot, but has realized through pain there is success. 

Graduation

As time winds down an old chapter closes and a new chapter begins the low roar of what it seemed to be like screaming fans were waiting. My time in high school was coming to an end. All that hard work was finally going to pay off all those sleepless nights all those endless hours studying it was time. Time for the gates of adulthood to open up and I was ready to hit the ground running. The blue silver and white banners saying congratulations graduates felt unreal. The quote by nelson Mandela truly meant a huge amount to me now every task seems impossible until it is done. It was unreal to me that four years have passed and it was finally over. In my all blue cap and gown. The only words exchanged between students were “we made it man congrats”. As all of these thoughts were unraveling in my head it was time for me to stand. My row was next we stood at attention and gracefully executed the moves that we were taught the week before as we walked up to stage butterflies rushing through my stomach and all I could do was smile.

As I was searching for my mother in the huge crowd of proud parents and relatives right before I went up to get the piece of paper that I worked so hard for. I found my mother in that beautiful elegant dress her smile stretched from ear to ear and as they called my name that single tear drop fell from her cheek and this tear meant so much to me do to the fact that this was the most powerful and independent women that I have ever encountered in my life. All my life she was strong and never shed a single tear and that one tear showed me that I finally made her proud she had finally watch her son become a man. A man I became, throughout these past four years I learned so much from my peer and my teachers, but more importantly myself. I learned things that seemed impossible for me were accomplished and things that were beyond my horizon soon become possible to touch. One thing I can definitely say is that life throws curveballs but when they come high schools teaches you to sit in the batters box wait for it and knock it out the park.

Courage To Grow Scholarship

Please explain in 250 words or less why you believe that you should be awarded this scholarship.    

I deserve this scholarship because of the amount of things I can do with money. I have excelled at everything I have done in the past and I plan to become very successful. I have been an excellent student as long as I can remember and it all started in elementary school. In elementary school the grading system was numbers and it was from one to five and one was the lowest and five was the highest. The six years I spent there I got only fives on everything.  My success continued throughout high school and middle school. All throughout middle I never received a letter grade below a B and I even received an award for having honor rolls all three year. Things changed a little in high school because I received my first C and also my first D, but I worked hard and was able to raise my grade so that on my transcript I would not have any bad grades and I did not get any. The success I had in school translated to all the sports I played throughout my life.

            In my life I have played five different sports and I have done well in all of them. Baseball was the first sport I played and from what I can remember every game I pitch I did not let up more then one run and I got on base at least once every game. In football I played on both sides of the ball in every game I had a touchdown and at least five tackles. In soccer I scored every other game and my first year of wrestling I went seven and two. In basketball a played AAU on the Jaguars and we won nationals my first year on the team. I played in another league and I average a Double-double and we won the championship. In high school I did not score that much, but I was a great defender so I probably average four points a game and the player I was defending never scored more than me. I did well in sports because I treated it like another class and I just tried to work as hard as I can. 

I know I can succeed if just put my mind to it. I have big goals for the future and I am hoping to impact many lives. Due to my huge goals I might need some more than four years of college. I want to be a doctor and I know I can do it with a little more support. I feel that if I am awarded this scholarship it will help me accomplish my dream and since I have always be successful I know I deserve the scholarship. The money will definitely be well spent if I am awarded this scholarship.

Rhetorical Analysis of "The Body in Room 348"

The story written by Mark Bowden, “The Body in Room 348,” is about a true crime that happened in Texas and the victim was Greg Fleniken. The story is effective because the style Bowden uses is a very informational and descriptive one. In the first three paragraphs are very engaging and it feels as if Bowden was actually there describing every little detail. Greg was “lounging, smoking, snacking on a Reese’s Crispy Crunchy bar, sipping root beer, and watching Iron Man 2” (Bowden 1). Bowden does a great describing the scene and setting up the story. Later in the night as Greg finishes his conversation with his wife “Greg was struck from nowhere with real and shattering blow. A blow so violent it would blind a man with pain. He managed to get off the bed and move toward the door before he fell, legs splayed and face-first. He probably was dead by the time his face hit the green rug” (Bowden 1). Bowden uses great words like shattering and splayed to enhance the story and also leaves the reading guesses, thinking, and wondering what happen to Greg. It seems very sudden and does not make sense.

Bowden tells the story in way that gets the reader reading more because the plot gets more descriptive and more interesting once they get closer to an answer of what happen. The detective on the scene was Scott Apple “a short and very fit man with graying hair that he wears combed straight up in spikes” (Bowden 1). Bowden gives a good sense of how Apples looks and the description can get a good imagine in the readers head. Apple gathers information but very slowly and ends up leading to nothing mostly because they thought cause of death was a severe beating, which is later proven wrong. Bowden slowing gives information and slowly leads up to the climax, which is when they finally figure out that Greg was shoot and this come from the help of a private detective named Ken Brennan who was hired by Greg’s wife. Once they figure that out the rest is easy and they catch the killer who was next-door and accidental shoot a gun, which ended up hitting Greg. The killer was Mr. Steinmetz who was sentenced to ten years in prison.            

Bowden does a great job telling this story and since it is real he has to be very descriptive and accurate. He keeps the reader engaged and does not try and fly through all the information in the story. He describes all the character very well as well as the setting and plot. It is not easy writing about a crime but the story had good imagery and detail: writing about a crime require a lot and Bowden gets everything spot on.

writing to a public audience

Writing to a public audience changes my writing style completely. To avoid negative comments or feedback, I would try not to be offensive in m writing. I would usually write in a way that everyone would be able to understand me and I want to be clear on whatever point I am trying to make. Writing to a public makes me more aware what I am writing because I cannot write whatever I wanted to.

For example, I would have to take into consider other people and their different features like skin color and or with people with different beliefs like religion. I just cannot say horrible things about a certain race or religion because it is wrong.  I would want people of all different kinds to enjoy my writing. If I offend anyone it takes hundreds of people that could have been a fan of my work, but it would be ruined because of inconsiderate words that were written.

I would want to write so people can relate to me and know exactly what I am talking about. I would want people to want to read more and get engaged. So I would take my time and make sure that there are no grammatical errors because it is embarrassing when you write for a public audience and you spell something wrong. Also if there are no grammatical it flows better and would be easy to read. I make sure that I reread, revise, and edit multiple times.

If it had a specific audience I would have to pick an appropriate language. If I were targeting children I would not use long and complex words I would keep it short and simple. Also I would talk about things the kids actually know about not what a teenager or adult would.  For different ages I would use different diction so they could better understand me. Language is not the only thing that has to be taken into consideration when writing to a certain audience, because you have pay attention to things like tone and purpose. I cannot have a very strong tone if I am trying to target children because they probably would not be interested in it. For children I would need like a soft and fun voice so they would enjoy it. Also if you write something with no purpose no one would read it. When I type I want there to be a purpose so someone would get something out of my writing. I want my writing to mean something so I write differently for a public audience.   

Writing

I have never been a good writer. I hate writing because I am awful at it. My writing skills are extremely poor and I have never written a really good paper. Every time I wrote something I would usually never proofread my work because I hate reading my own work. I feel that writing is pointless and boring. Writing is just a skill that has not come easy to me because I have yet to have a breakthrough in my writing.

 A reason for my poor writing skills are probably because of my teachers. The teachers I had were a combination of really soft graders and tough graders, which effected me in high school. My freshman year I had a tough grader and I was consistently getting Cs on my papers. Everything I did to improve did not work and I just gave up on my writing. The next year I had an easy grader because I was getting Bs and sometimes higher. So I thought my writing was getting better, but my English teacher from junior year assured me nothing has changed. My first paper my junior year I got a fifty-nine percent, which was shocking because of the year I had before. My writing keeps bouncing between different teachers so I feel I am not getting honest feedback. I was just unfortunate to get teachers with different grading methods and it caused me to be an awful writer. Some teacher would give me a B on a paper and then another teacher would give me a D on the same paper. That is why I have not had a break through in my writing and that is the reason I am not getting any better.

After my junior year, I truly realized that writing was not for me. I was continuously getting poor grades on my paper and it just hit me that my writing will never improve. My junior year completely destroyed my writing and my confidence in my writing. Especially, when I would get a paper back and it would have little comments and a very poor grade. So I really did not know what I was lacking in or where I needed to make improvements. I would spend multiple hours working on a paper and I felt it was for no reason because the paper would result in a grade that was a D or below. My teacher was very cold and heartless. He really did not care and was not very helpful during or after class. The end of my junior year is where I just come to the conclusion that my writing was the way it was and it would not change. So by my senior year I did not try on any writing assignment because I felt like there was no point. I did the writing assignment just to complete it and put no effort into it, but since I am in college I am hoping that I will finally have the breakthrough I have been looking for in my writing.

Lady Gaga

The music review written about Lady Gaga is called “Lavish Worlds, and the Headwear to Match” by Jon Pareles. It is written in a very unique way because he is trying to appeal to a certain group like music lover and young adults. He does this by using a very informative, descriptive, and praising voice throughout the review trying to get people to better know Lady Gaga. Pareles uses many facts about her that people probably did not know like, “Lady Gaga [is] a multi-selling, Grammy-nominated star in less than a year.”  Pareles would be attracting music lovers because they would have to take interests in someone who is as talented as her and who has all her accomplishments in such little time. Especially when Pareles is saying she was “sounding like a female Elton John” and Elton is an all time great. Lady Gaga was not only compared to Elton John she was compared to “show people like David Bowie and Madonna established this career path, Lady Gaga is strutting along it with larger-than-life style and, behind that, actual musical gift.”  The review compares Lady Gaga to some of the greats like causing people to take notice.

Young adults would be interested because of how descriptive Pareles is and his word choice like when he says, “no one in pop is more audacious about headwear.”  Pareles uses the word audacious, which is a very bold descriptive word and stands out. When someone reads this it will catch his or her eyes and young people usually love young artist who make fashion statement and that are very outgoing. The review talks her outfits with a lot of details and a little about herself. It also talks about how much she loves her fans and what she thinks about them. It would seem that Pareles is a big fan of Lady Gaga and is trying to get more to enjoy her music. Pareles is very descriptive about her tour he also sounds fascinated how she entertains the fans and with her personality. The review is also written in the New York Times, which is a very decorated newspaper and many read it. New York is a big state and Pareles wanted a huge audience trying to attract as many being he can and this newspaper is not only read by people in New York people all over are able to read it. Pareles uses his voice in a smart way and accomplished what he was trying to do.   

Angel Olmo

I was born in Boston, but I have lived most of my life in Framingham. My life in Framingham was boring and there was really nothing to do so at a young age my mother put me in baseball. I started baseball when I was five and I ended my career at eighteen. Baseball was not the only sport a played over the years I have played football, soccer, basketball, and I wrestled. All the sports kept me active and I got to know all of people. Every year I played football I hurt so I never got to play a full season of football. I first started playing football in seventh grade and I ended up breaking my arm at practice. So that season I only got to play five games. Then the next year I played one game and right before the second game I was playing catch and jumped into a ditch and broke my leg. After those to injuries I decided to keep playing because I thought to myself what are the chances that I get hurt again. So entering my freshman year of high school I joined the football team and the fourth game of the season I broke my leg again. This time it was during a game and I played through because at the time it hurt, but I did not know it was broken till after the game. I was walking to my mom's car and I could even but any pressure on my leg and ended up not playing the rest season. This continued for the next three years, but with different injuries. That is my sports history and now here is my school history. I lived right across an elementary school, but decide to go to one that was on the other side of town. So I never know anyone in my neighborhood I would have to go across town to see all my friends. But once I was in middle school, it was a different story because I lived five minutes away from the school and they were the ones going across town. Middle school was when I started meeting kids in my neighborhood  because I would see them while walking to school. So once I got to high school I knew on both sides of town, which was very convenient. I always to alright in school and in middle school I made honors every trimester of every year, but when I got to high school things change. I experienced my first C and after that they become more frequent, but I still got my fair share of As and Bs. I had my ups and down in high school sometimes I did very well and other time not so much, but in the end I graduated with a 3.3 GPA, which is not the greatest but it was not the worst either. I never wanted to go to college, but my mom made me. I applied to six different colleges I got into all of them and I'm not really sure why I chose to go to BSU, but I did and so far it is not that bad.